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Flavor Text in Fallen Enchantress

By on October 22, 2011 1:53:14 PM from JoeUser Forums JoeUser Forums

In every Stardock game ever, from 1993 on, the “flavor text” was done by whoever had a moment to throw something in there.

Often times, it meant I did it since I type 120wpm and could crank out a lot of stuff.  The GalCiv technology descriptions are notorious for this.

In War of Magic, we decided that we would keep the tongue in cheek text to a minimum which in reality just made it dry and boring.

Since we didn’t enjoy doing it and our fans really wanted to see our games start having some “soul” to them, we hired Sci-Fi writer, Dave Stern full time. He’s been with us since January and the results will be pretty obvious in Fallen Enchantress.

Screenshots:

I’m not a marketing person so these screenshot are taken by me in the debugger so keep that in mind (i.e. all graphical enhancements are turned to min for max performance in the debugger):

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So Dave would write up a lengthy story along with something short for the in-game part. We would then be inspired to come up with game mechanics around it.

For example, in WOM, the Urxen were described as “Like Trogs but less warlike but more productive”.

In FE, Dave wrote a story about the history of the Urxen and their lives under Lady Umber. This in turn allowed us to come up with some unique traits that simply didn’t exist in WOM like Wanderlust and Serpent’s pack. Wanderlust lets players have Exploration technology early and Serpent’s pack lets them recruit a special type of unit in game.

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Goodbye…”Random” name generator

I am sure people will miss our random name generator.  Instead, Dave Stern wrote up hundreds of different names that made sense based on which faction they were for and whether they were male or female.

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The creatures of Elemental have also gotten their lore updated.

So for example, Rock Spiders are no longer described as “big tough spiders” but rather:

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And of course NPCs now are individually described:

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Now, is all this necessary?

We think so because each game plays out very differently and these familiar creatures and characters will provide a general continuity.

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Turn 1.

A big objective is for the world to seem alive and interesting worth exploring. Each tile should mean something. Every expansion to your empire a victory. Every character important and valuable.

Will it be worth it?  That’s hard to say.  We think it’s worth it. Our primary objective with Elemental has been to create a brand-new PC fantasy strategy franchise.  We learned a lot with War of Magic and have applied those lessons to Fallen Enchantress. And one key lesson was imbuing the world with lore to bring the player to the world and make it theirs.

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October 22, 2011 2:03:27 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Love the individual backstories for champions. That's the sort of fluffy content that E:wom mostly missed.

October 22, 2011 2:21:46 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

I'm glad that we're getting a bit of proper lore. I've got some qualms about this stuff, though.

The leader information strikes me as a bit vague and general; assuming these are the default leaders that AI will use, there should be a pinch more information about their past exploits. Kul-al-Kulan's amounts to "I HEARD HE'S MULATTO" and what we have for Carrodus is a fairly boring resume and then a hole with no explanation of how he might have rose to prominence.

Leadanna's fluff is excellent, giving us all the information we need in addition to being pleasant to read. Amusingly enough, it would make an adequate backstory for a sovereign, with the "last of my house" bit in there. Although with her fluff, I'd think Int would be a bit higher.

In "Rock Spider" fluff: "for their various uses" is shit. Either specify some prominent uses (two is ideal) as ", most prominently X and Y" or omit the phrase.

 

And I didn't mind the GalCiv technology information. Taking WoM out of that vein is fine, but I hope this doesn't mean the next iteration of GalCiv (whenever that might be) will be similarly humorless.

October 22, 2011 2:31:41 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

rofl......., uhmm..........., I know you don't want to give us all the info on the games details, but I pray you help me with this one.... What is Leadanna's third trait on the top left (the red one) for I'm affraid to continue guessing after I thought of what the effect might be: "smells of rotten clams" -7 to charisma as she seems to be at least a 13 charisma to me

 

ps I tried to keep this appropriate as much as possible, hopefully only those with the same mind frame will understand

October 22, 2011 2:37:50 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Now, is all this necessary?

 

Absolutely! Beside the other important stuff (i don´t repeat it) this is exactly what is needed. Especially the flavor text for the champions. I read Leadannas text only for one time and i don´t have to scroll back to remember her name or to have a picture of her in mind. Something that never happend in/with WoM.

 

Thanks frogboy!

 

EDIT/

But... maybe you could give me some advice, how to manage this, after your "lore post".

 

I think you should assume that FE will suck and give you a disease.
 
Assume that all your worst fears about it are true and give up hope now. You'll feel better.

 

October 22, 2011 3:33:35 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Looks good.

October 22, 2011 3:45:17 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Do the rivers always need to flow from N, S, E, W or can they also flow NW, NE, SE, & SW? I think they would look better by mixing up the directions a bit. This makes sense to me because unit movement from a tile is a choice of 8 directions - why rivers only 4?

I'm not sure if it's possible but coding rivers to flow from highlands to lowlands would be nice - I'm sure you've looked at that. It would be less than ideal to see a river flow from a lowland grassland into hills or mountains.

Like the lore stuff, it will certainly help with immersion.

October 22, 2011 4:27:11 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Fantastic! I always enjoyed reading the lore (GalCiv2 techs were great!) Lore can drag you into your game and before you know it hours are gone and not minutes (thank god for in game clocks).

October 22, 2011 4:43:21 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Great stuff, but the grammar needs a bit of work..  Are you sure that an author wrote this...?

October 22, 2011 5:19:27 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

This is one of those little things that can make a good game very good, or a very good game great.

 

I like this.

 

 

October 22, 2011 5:49:03 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Really going to enjoy reading those. This is what is meant by polish. Glad to see FE is getting everything it needs to be a great game. 

October 22, 2011 5:54:13 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Love the lore. I believe putting resources behind it is worth it.

I share the concern with Allan about rivers. It would be really good if they could flow in 8 directions insead of the four displayed so far. Also, the river in the screen stops abruptly and makes no sense.

October 22, 2011 6:37:53 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

It pours down into an aquifer I bet. 

October 22, 2011 6:48:45 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

not to dampen the mood Brad and sound like a record player, but just imagine if Stardock had of listened to more than one WOM beta tester before release about the lack of game immersion?

 

more dialogue.. more flavor text.. lore.. whatever you want to call it.. some compulsion to play the game because of its immersive story like qualities that want you to find out more about the world.. .. this is what WOM needed but I'm glad that you are now attempting to bring more immersion into FE..

October 22, 2011 7:27:30 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Flavor text will be a huge improvement. I'm really looking forward to FE, can't wait for the beta.

Quoting AlLanMandragoran,
Do the rivers always need to flow from N, S, E, W or can they also flow NW, NE, SE, & SW? I think they would look better by mixing up the directions a bit. This makes sense to me because unit movement from a tile is a choice of 8 directions - why rivers only 4?

I'm not sure if it's possible but coding rivers to flow from highlands to lowlands would be nice - I'm sure you've looked at that. It would be less than ideal to see a river flow from a lowland grassland into hills or mountains.

Like the lore stuff, it will certainly help with immersion.

Agree with this.

I love the fact that we're getting rivers, but now they just need some appearance tweeks so they don't look quite so garish. 

1. headwaters square looks like the river just jumps out of the ground fully formed. If its going to look like this make it look more like a spring and not just a dead end of a river. Alternatively, make it look like its consolidating from other smaller streams and brooks.

2.The river looks like its floating above the surrounding ground level rather than below it. This may actually be how the engine in rendering the river, but someone needs to do some optical illusion trikery to make it appear otherwise.

3. No river I've ever seen has a uniform muddy bank down each side for its entire length. Very the banks a little more. Add some trees, add some rapids, secluded pools, sandy banks, larger boulders, small pebble beaches, a waterfall effect if it goes over a steep change in elevation, etc.

 

 

October 22, 2011 7:54:57 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Obviously Elemental simply required more time for the craftsmanship's varied efforts. And additional craftsman. Some really good ones apparantly. All of you on the team are creating an inevitable masterpiece. Looking nerdaliscious

October 22, 2011 7:55:17 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

I am just happy we have rivers to critique. What will tactical maps look like if one attacks an army on a river tile? 

October 22, 2011 7:58:53 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

This journal entry is the most important i have read so far about FE and i know now that i will buy this game. I always felt that the greatest problem in Stardock games was the total lack of flavor. Galactic Civilizations 2 with its expansions was really a beautiful game but i couldn't enjoy it fully because technology, races, improvement description were so bad and bland that i couldn't find its atmosphere immersive. It's really nice to know that Stardock is trying to improve this aspect in their games.

October 22, 2011 8:15:56 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

I know what you mean. I went through made unique flavor texts for every vanilla and modded race. Took so much time...

October 22, 2011 8:41:04 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Serpent's Pact was mine c: This made my day just a little happier.

Will the collection of assorted writings be made available at any point? I'd like to know more of the lore in the world, and since WoM was rather sparse in that department...well, more lore is good lore, no?

Also, if I can be so bold...would it be at all possible to get a lore tidbit in-game for leaders more akin to Leadanna's lore? That is, a sort of personal blurb about the person. For choosing a sovereign what there already is seems great, since we'll need just a quick dossier, but when I'm in game I'd like to be able to take a gander at more of the other sovereign's personality. For example, with Leadanna I get the impression that she's well-bred, someone who is smart and skilled with numbers, as well as someone who is concerned about her name, Merdici, falling into obscurity. So as a whole, from reading that blurb I get the impression that she was once a noblewoman or at least someone of import, and I'm actually interested, now, in hunting her down in Fallen Enchantress so I can personally see to the continuity of her name.

...hm...champions can't get married...I'll need to fix that.

As to everything that we have, I am really looking forward to Fallen Enchantress. I fully plan to spend my winter break sitting behind my computer and beta-ing away. Elemental wasn't bad, but it wasn't great either - I'm itching to play FE, and carve out my own story in the world. As always, I look forward to Stardock's next big creation.

Now to go re-read Destiny's Embers...

-Nathikal

October 22, 2011 9:53:42 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums
I'm glad that when rock spiders go stalking, their prey is camouflaged against the backdrop of the wastelands  with a horrifying efficiency.  All kidding aside, I like this development.  A little bit of fiction goes a long way, and if the author reads a little like Lovecraft, that's even better. The writting here matches well the style of the Elemental timeline we got some time ago.  I rather like Elemental's theme of fantasy overlaid on top of a sci fi setting, kind of like Dying Earth, and if we get more of it Elemental will be a better game. I was one of those who said to drop the random name generator and replace it with a list of faction specific names, who knows I might have been among the first who posted it , but I never wanted to see it gotten rid of completely. The random name generator had it's own charm, sometimes. It was good for a laugh here and there. Keep it optional!
October 23, 2011 4:11:22 AM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Quoting Grizzyloins,
rofl......., uhmm..........., I know you don't want to give us all the info on the games details, but I pray you help me with this one.... What is Leadanna's third trait on the top left (the red one) for I'm affraid to continue guessing after I thought of what the effect might be: "smells of rotten clams" -7 to charisma as she seems to be at least a 13 charisma to me

 

ps I tried to keep this appropriate as much as possible, hopefully only those with the same mind frame will understand

I think the trait is "Frail", which perhaps means she heals slower. But yours was funnier.

Flavor text is so important, it is a very good move to add more of it I think. I remember the first AoW had a lot of unit descriptions written by a real writer, and when AoW2 came there were no descriptions at all and it felt empty.

October 23, 2011 6:18:12 AM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Yes, with a game world, the more it feels like a "world" rather than a "game" the better.

Best regards,
Steven.

October 23, 2011 7:36:09 AM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Some of this stuff has made me wish for a feature in the 2nd expansion.

 

I kinda want these creatures/critters spare parts to be usable in Dredmor-style alchemy, with levels learnable with tech, to make armor.  This would have to be balanced out though.  For example, something like skath hide+ rock spider armor= an adventurer's armor that would be the equivalent of light plate but slightly better.

 

October 23, 2011 12:05:07 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Wow, this is really awesome!

The best part is that Leadanna's history is in first person. It sort of feels likes she spoke to me, I really makes her come alive.

 

But then again, I'm afraid this game, and Leadanna, gives me aids.

October 23, 2011 12:58:37 PM from Elemental Forums Elemental Forums

Love that Rock Spiders have higher charisma then the leaders and champions. ^^

But seriously, great work

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